on Oct 28, 2015
Thanks for submitting! The performances were good. It looked good. The guy is like a blonde Stephen Root!
The pacing was weird. It took 1:30 to get to the title and until 3:00 to get to the action.
There wasn't a real conflict. They set out to humiliate a guy by robbing him (goals are good!) which they then do without any hiccups.
Why were they captured by animal mask people?
How did he have sex with that picture? Was there a hole in it, or was he rubbing his penis against the outside?
Check out Harmon's story structure tutorials. They're pretty helpful:
Oct 31, 2015 at 2:49pm
Hey folks, I submitted for this month's screening and I got rejected. It was a bummer, but I'm a first timer and I had anticipated this might happen. Here's a link to the pilot.
I'd love any feedback any of you have to offer on how we can secure a sweet spot in a future Channel 101 screening. Honesty, even if it's brutal, is very much appreciated.
Oct 28, 2015 at 12:27pm
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