Rejectee Therapy for Another Rejected
Started by Kaylan Aksel on Oct 26, 2017
  • Hey Kaylan,

    Very much hope you don't give up. Most Channel101 regulars, myself included, have faced many rejections and cancellations and not getting voted back. It sucks! But it's not a bug in the system, it's a feature.

    I wasn't on the panel this month but I just checked your pilot out. You definitely seem to know the rhythm of how a show feels (getting a goal, going into an unfamiliar place, low point, climax, etc) but something does feel missing. Maybe Oliver hit the nail on the head with pacing. Definitely a lot of set ups and not very strong pay offs (he talks in a girls voice and he punches a choking girl). The Mulan song is always fun to hear but that's pretty much all you got for a large part of the show. This premise is familiar territory, which is fine, but it doesn't even go further than Some Like it Hot or Mrs Doubtfire (other than an abortion joke which didn't land super hard for me).

    Another thing to consider is the acting. Personally, when there's silly situations, I think it's always more satisfying to see grounded actors. I think you should click through Wade and Kelsy's shows. Their sensibilities tend to be on the sillier side and their performances are very big but there's something grounded about how they play everything that makes it really satisfying to watch.

    Keep submitting!
    Oct 31, 2017 at 4:57pm
  • You should work on the pacing - I feel like it doesn't flow as well as it could. The sound effects were maybe a little OTT - if you use them more sparingly they'll be funnier when you do. Also, there seemed to be a weird set up:joke ratio that might have been why you weren't picked this time. Don't give up though, persevere!
    Oct 26, 2017 at 2:55pm

    Could use some notes, or maybe a pick me up. I think this is time #5 I've submitted and been rejected. Not sure if I should be proud of it or exhausted.

    Idk, this close to giving up on this and moving on.

    But I still want to know what storytelling skills I can improve on, so please, any and all notes are welcome.
    Oct 26, 2017 at 2:42pm
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