Rejectee Therapy for Purpleman Adventures - Would love any feedback or suggestions. I have no ego. Only want to get bette
Started by PAUL SPRANGERS on Oct 26, 2017
  • Wow, thank you so much guys! These are great notes and I will absolutely take them.

    Oliver, I appreciate the attention to detail and it made me realize that I need to be WAY more thoughtful about how all the details connect and add up.

    Tom, these are good ideas and I think resonates with me in the same way Oliver's notes do - I need to connect the dots and be consistent with the premise and lnternal logic of the show. And part of the problem might be I didn't establish what purpleman's powers are, like you mention, nor monsanty's. Therefore, there really aren't any stakes and nothing really lands.

    This totally helps and I know how I'm going to approach the next one. Thanks guys!!
    Oct 28, 2017 at 5:26am
  • I agree with Oliver.
    Personally, I'd try and think of things in a sort of 3 act structure. Do some study on that - the better you know it, the easier it will be to condense into 5 minutes.

    Try and create connections and thus jokes in as many elements as you can. Why is the villain a villain? What is her power? Why is the hero who he is? What is his past? Perhaps he tried to masturbate with a microwaved aubergine as a teenager, and entered a soul-bond with the essence of aubergine. This joke could be pulled off within 15-20 seconds (pun intended).

    What's the opposite of that? - and you've got your villain. etc. etc.

    The Monsanto joke landed for me just cause it was so on the nose. Maybe expand on that. What is Monsanto in your universe? Why is it destroying plantlife? Why does your protagonist care?

    Ask questions like those, then make the answers comedic. That would be my advice.
    Oct 27, 2017 at 5:06pm
  • Hi Paul, I think the premise is good, but you didn't play the whole fruit and veg side up as well as you could have - e.g. if he's a veg superhero, it should be like 60s Batman where everything is a fruit/veg pun. Personally I thought some of the jokes didn't really land, and some got caught in parts of the story that didn't really make sense - when the poison doesn't affect you but we just saw the whole skeleton/clock trip, and where you're immune because you're organic, but wild rainforest trees (which are organic too) are affected. I know these may seem like little things, but it just helps the story be a little more consistent and funnier. We liked the low-fi effects, and playing on the fact that us low budget creators don't have the effects worked well - we've found we relate way more to creators who don't rely on production value, but content itself.
    Oct 27, 2017 at 1:53pm
  • Please don't pull any punches! I'm a big boy.

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=K0qwSK2cN9w

    Thank you! I love channel 101.
    Oct 26, 2017 at 8:02pm
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