Rejectee Therapy for Evil Clone 'n Me
Started by Christopher Rothschild on Oct 27, 2017
  • I think it's good for internet channel purposes, but it's inadequate for classic TV standards, and here are some reasons i think it's that way:
    -a Tv show gives privilege to classic structure of their storyteliing. Your video didn't aim to that, and therefore failed.
    -the sound it's low quality for tv settings.
    -the story don't show up features of possible future happenings.
    I'm not entirely sure if my analysis is correct, but you have some points to study your flaws if you wnat to put this on a tv screen. But for a youtube channel, for example, it's fine and good.
    Nov 22, 2017 at 4:12am
  • Hi Christopher. For me the biggest problem seemed to be the pacing - the pilot was a little slow, and nothing really happened. I get that it's really hard to do any kind of action by yourself, but any kind of movement or action will improve the show. If it's full of dialogue, the dialogue has to be really, really funny, and your jokes didn't seem to land this time - again, pacing will help with that. If one of you is evil, you should play that up - make him super evil - the non-clone Christopher didn't react to the 'evilness' of the other. Playing it all up will help the comedy side a lot. The main idea of an evil clone is a good one for just one person to produce, so maybe try reworking it. (P.S. we love your Pokemon plushies).
    Oct 27, 2017 at 9:15pm
  • https://youtu.be/g7G5iX0jWQY

    Just want to see how I can improve
    Oct 27, 2017 at 8:10pm
You have to log in to comment. If you aren't registered yet, Sign Up!