Rejectee Therapy for A Day in the Life (rejected pilot)
Started by Stanley Wong on Apr 25, 2018
  • KP Parker says:
    Well shot, well acted, and super fun, Stanley. Agreed with Adam, I wanted just a touch more set-up and a touch less action! The name needs to help people remember what it was about. At the panel when it came time to vote "A Day in the Life" could have been a number of different episodes. "Under Attack", "Survive the Day", "Life is a Disaster" are broad enough to help us remember oh yeah that's the one with them fighting a disaster.
    I seriously love the way this looks and I'm excited to see more!
    May 01, 2018 at 8:47pm
  • I most likely wouldn’t want to watch a show about people just getting tacos either. My point there was more about how when you make a pilot, I think you should be thinking of it like it’s for a real TV series. An important part of a good pilot (both on Channel 101 and real TV) is making it easy for the audience to see how this could sustain itself for a bunch of episodes, and also making them want to watch those episodes.
    Apr 26, 2018 at 9:55am
  • Took it off youtube. Here's a google drive link if people are still curious.
    https://drive.google.com/open?id=1sNKKlbypi8lJ0T8MAX0PXZSeyfa4wr_l

    Interesting notes. For the general concept we were gonna do another mundane thing like doing laundry but explore it with something extraordinary like... I dunno a natural disaster. I like the title and wouldn't want to necessarily keep it to tacos.
    Apr 26, 2018 at 9:14am
  • I thought this pilot has a nice light touch tonally and the special effects are really good. The biggest problem areas for me (I wasn’t on the panel though) were character and story.

    I think if a show is going to be made up of mostly action scenes, in order for them to truly work then the audience has to care about the characters. If it’s all action and no character/story, it becomes a wash. The action in this show starts before we get a chance to know the two main characters at all. Neither before nor after the action starts do the characters ever really make any decisions that would give the audience insight into who the characters are and why the audience should care about them.

    Side note on a story level, I know “Spread the cream” was technically set up and paid off but even that was sort of apropos of nothing, so it doesn't have much resonance when it happens.

    One other thing: I think A Day in the Life is not a particularly evocative title. Getting Tacos is probably even a better title than A Day in the Life, and captures the mundanity you’re going for in a more specific way. In fact, and now I’m just spitballing here, but if Getting Tacos were the title, every episode could be about them trying to get tacos but insane obstacles like aliens and monsters and God or whoever get in their way. Also, I probably wouldn’t let them get the tacos (at least without paying a heavy price for them) but that’s me. With a title like A Day in the Life, it's hard to know what the show is about and to imagine how it could continue for multiple episodes.

    At the end of the day though, this seems like a job for the story circle:
    http://channel101.wikia.com/wiki/Story_Structure_101:_Super_Basic_Shit

    Anyway, I hope you submit more in the future!
    Apr 26, 2018 at 7:05am
  • https://youtu.be/cvRojVprH-8
    Apr 25, 2018 at 7:36am
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