Rejectee Therapy for Salt Lake 2003 Rejected Pilot
Started by John Leonard on Aug 22, 2018
  • Thank you both for the comments. I appreciate the feedback. I can definitely see how bringing John Stockton in would be a great moment for the show and the characters. I hadn't thought about the brightness of the background. Thanks again.
    Aug 29, 2018 at 2:10am
  • Brad Gage says:
    My main critique is that you spend the majority of the episode talking about a character who doesn't actually show up in the story. This is a thing that happens in improv scenes sometimes as well, making the audience lose interest. There are no active character moments or furthering of a of story. I would say if you wanted to make an ep about John Stockton stuff, have him appear in it, or give him some importance to one of the character's plots.
    Aug 28, 2018 at 2:10am
  • I may post about the content of your show later, but my biggest note is as an audience member:

    Channel 101 plays on a huge screen in a dark theater. Your show is PURE BRIGHT WHITE. It'd be physically painful to watch your show in a movie theater.
    Aug 27, 2018 at 7:44am
  • This is a new pilot for an idea I've submitted a few times. Not sure how it plays outside of Utah but I wanted to make it either way. Thanks for watching and the feedback, appreciated as always.

    https://youtu.be/DCZbdozoXQs
    Aug 22, 2018 at 4:41pm
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