Rejectee Therapy for Rejected this month, would appreciate any and all feedback, thanks!
Started by Nick Chilson on Apr 24, 2019
  • Thanks Brett! Will definitely take all this into account and revisit my approach
    May 05, 2019 at 5:06pm
  • Yo dude! Thanks for submitting.

    Firstly, really dug the new opening intro you added. Really made it feel like a show and got excited once it played. The premise of the show is fun and the tone that the two main characters talk in/interact is great. Solid animation quality too!

    The video played really well for the first quarter, then started to lose steam. Adding more of a narrative could help with this. Would recommend looking up "Dan Harmon Story Circle" on google for a quick crash course.

    The crudeness, although fun at first, stopped playing as we went on. Especially with the Dobby scene. Just drinking, smoking, swearing, and pissin' wasn't enough without any fun twist on it.

    Then, adding in Rick & Morty didn't do you any favors. I would much rather get invested in original characters that make sense in this universe. We also had a few other pilots have Rick & Morty pop up randomly. It never played.

    Otherwise, I would say keep it up! There's definitely some good stuff here and hope you keep submitting!
    May 04, 2019 at 2:36am
  • Here's the link to KYLE AND WAYNE GO TO HOGWARTS TOO:
    Apr 24, 2019 at 1:51pm
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